creating a link between humans and the animals
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creating a link between humans and the animals
Jared Linscombe ENG/200 v4
Self-Assessment
ENG/200 v4
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Self-Assessment
- What strategies did you use to appeal to your audience? How effective do you feel you have been in convincing the readers to agree with your position? Mark any passages that need improvement or additional support. Pay attention to areas where your instructor has provided feedback. Response: I involved the reader in logical reasoning by engaging several examples that would help them identify with my logic. The thesis statement needs to incorporate a three-dimensional approach to the matter. The conclusion should have been more conclusive, summarizing my thesis and how effectively I have managed to defend it.
- What part of this paper are you the proudest of? Include a quote and/or description from your essay as an example. Explain why you think this part is effective. How might you amplify strengths like this in the final paper? Make a note to yourself within your draft to remind you where you want to expand on the strengths you’ve mentioned. Response: “They also feel the delight and the agony, they recollect, they have the experience, they foresee, they are able to learn, additionally what happens to the animals is very vital to them and different from what happens to the other non-living creatures.” This part is useful because I managed to create a link between humans and the animals, for the audience to see how similar the two are. This makes the audience consider the position of the animal by realizing they share common traits, and they would not be comfortable being mistreated either.
- Review your thesis statement in the introduction and any comments from your instructor and include it here on the worksheet. Is it a complete sentence that reflects the main argument and does it contain 3 supporting reasons? If not, what changes will you make to revise it? (See also the thesis tutorials at the Center for Writing Excellence if you need additional support.) Response: the thesis statement has four supporting reasons which are supposed to be reflected within the subsequent paragraphs. The comment from my instructor shows that I need to focus on making the four points legible throughout the draft. I have to focus on how the four points illuminate the overall intended purpose of the thesis statement.
- How, specifically, did you get the reader’s attention in the introduction? What style or approach did you use, and what did you hope to achieve by using it? If this part of your paper needs improvement, what strategy might you try instead? Why might this be a stronger strategy? Apply that change to the final paper. Response: In the introductory paragraph, I intended to engage the reader in food for thought whereby they are supposed to question their idea of who sets the rights and what exactly are the criteria.
- Examine the research you collected and used for support. In your rough draft, underline or highlight all the places where you have used evidence within the paper. Is each body paragraph supported by at least one piece of evidence, and is it compelling? Is the research from multiple sources, of which at least one is peer-reviewed? Make a note to yourself about places within each paragraph where you will want to revise the evidence you present and where you might need to add research to support your ideas. Check the citations against the references. Do they match up? If not, what revision must you make? Response: My work entails information from two sources. From the two sources, I tried to capture the critical points of the draft. The citations match with the reference list.
- Do you feel that your paper shows a fair and balanced approach to your issue? If so, what did you do within the paper to ensure that was the case? If not, what specific changes will you make to be more balanced in your argument? How did you overcome any personal bias? Response: the draft did not entirely approach the issue with the balance. Throughout the paper, I did not bring out my four supporting ideas stated in the thesis statement. I focused more on the rights of the animals without highlighting other points.
- Go to the last paragraph of your paper and read the last sentence of that paragraph. Does the sentence make sense? Does it use proper grammar, punctuation, and any APA style necessary? If not, make note of the changes you will need to make during revision. Do this same type of review moving backwards through the essay, sentence by sentence. As you review your writing in this way, you might notice errors and patterns that you missed when reading from beginning to end. What did you discover in terms of research content, style, language, or grammar in your draft? What are at least two resources that you can use to help strengthen and support your writing in these areas? Response: the last sentence has a spelling mistake, and the sentence agreement is not correct. There are some punctuations missing. The sentence has a redundant statement and therefore did not pass the intended meaning. Being endangered is the same thing as being threatened so one cannot be a cause for the other as written in the statement.
- Use one of the reviewing services available in the Center for Writing Excellence to review this document. What are the next steps you will take to revise your daft and prepare to finalize your paper? Review the grading guide for the final paper. If you were scoring your revised draft according to that standard, what score do you feel it would achieve and why do you believe so? Response: I will check on punctuations and make sure they are placed correctly. I also need to work on framing the sentences to avoid any repetition and any vague clauses. I also need to check on all the spellings to ensure that they are correct. I will also review my four points and remain with only three, which will help me narrow my focus on the three. With those revisions, I believe my score would get to 95%. This is because I have considered the instructor’s instructions and rectified them together with other errors that are conspicuous within the draft. That would add marks to the current 85% mark.
RUBRIC
Excellent Quality
95-100%
Introduction 45-41 points
The background and significance of the problem and a clear statement of the research purpose is provided. The search history is mentioned.
Literature Support
91-84 points
The background and significance of the problem and a clear statement of the research purpose is provided. The search history is mentioned.
Methodology
58-53 points
Content is well-organized with headings for each slide and bulleted lists to group related material as needed. Use of font, color, graphics, effects, etc. to enhance readability and presentation content is excellent. Length requirements of 10 slides/pages or less is met.
Average Score
50-85%
40-38 points
More depth/detail for the background and significance is needed, or the research detail is not clear. No search history information is provided.
83-76 points
Review of relevant theoretical literature is evident, but there is little integration of studies into concepts related to problem. Review is partially focused and organized. Supporting and opposing research are included. Summary of information presented is included. Conclusion may not contain a biblical integration.
52-49 points
Content is somewhat organized, but no structure is apparent. The use of font, color, graphics, effects, etc. is occasionally detracting to the presentation content. Length requirements may not be met.
Poor Quality
0-45%
37-1 points
The background and/or significance are missing. No search history information is provided.
75-1 points
Review of relevant theoretical literature is evident, but there is no integration of studies into concepts related to problem. Review is partially focused and organized. Supporting and opposing research are not included in the summary of information presented. Conclusion does not contain a biblical integration.
48-1 points
There is no clear or logical organizational structure. No logical sequence is apparent. The use of font, color, graphics, effects etc. is often detracting to the presentation content. Length requirements may not be met
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